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English translation: The sentence is correct as it stands


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17:43 Nov 21, 2009
English to English translations [PRO]
Bus/Financial - Business/Commerce (general)
English term or phrase: the
Through this sentence:
"In all our activities we focus on development and on improvement in efficiency." a consulting company wishes to say that in all they do, they focus on bringing about (broadly understood) development to their clients' businesses and that they also improve their (again, broadly understood) efficiency.
Question: Are there any prepositions missing in this sentence for it to sound best? The context is rather clear, there is no reason to change the sentence around, just these prepositions...
Or maybe it should read "... and on improving the efficiency"? Any help greatly appreciated.
Mateusz Pohoryles
Poland
Local time: 03:04
English translation:The sentence is correct as it stands
Explanation:
The amendment you suggest would be better without "the".
Selected response from:

Jack Doughty
Local time: 02:04
Grading comment
Thank you.
4 KudoZ points were awarded for this answer



Summary of answers provided
4 +9The sentence is correct as it stands
Jack Doughty
5 +5and on improving efficiency
airmailrpl
4 +2In all our activities the focus is on development and improvement in efficiencyBashiqa
3 +2...and on an improvement in efficiency.
Vicky Nash


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5 mins   confidence: Answerer confidence 4/5Answerer confidence 4/5 peer agreement (net): +9
The sentence is correct as it stands


Explanation:
The amendment you suggest would be better without "the".

Jack Doughty
Local time: 02:04
Native speaker of: Native in EnglishEnglish
PRO pts in category: 102
Grading comment
Thank you.

Peer comments on this answer (and responses from the answerer)
agree  eesegura
6 mins
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agree  eski: I think so, too: Saludos, Jack! :)) eski
24 mins
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agree  cmwilliams
4 hrs
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agree  oberonsghost
6 hrs
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agree  Joyce A
9 hrs
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agree  Liam Hamilton
12 hrs
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agree  Kay Barbara
16 hrs
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agree  Goldcoaster
21 hrs
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agree  airmailrpl: The amendment would be better without "the".
1 day12 hrs
  -> Thank you.
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5 mins   confidence: Answerer confidence 3/5Answerer confidence 3/5 peer agreement (net): +2
...and on an improvement in efficiency.


Explanation:
It definitely does not need a definite article before "efficiency" but I would suggest that an "an" before improvement is neccessary.

Vicky Nash
United Kingdom
Local time: 02:04
Works in field
Native speaker of: Native in EnglishEnglish
PRO pts in category: 4

Peer comments on this answer (and responses from the answerer)
agree  Sheila Wilson: an improvement or, more likely perhaps, improvements
3 mins
  -> Yes. Thanks :)
agree  eesegura
6 mins
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33 mins   confidence: Answerer confidence 5/5 peer agreement (net): +5
and on improving efficiency


Explanation:
Or maybe it should read "... and on improving the efficiency"? => and on improving efficiency"

airmailrpl
Brazil
Local time: 00:04
Works in field
Native speaker of: Native in EnglishEnglish, Native in PortuguesePortuguese
PRO pts in category: 29

Peer comments on this answer (and responses from the answerer)
agree  xxxmediamatrix: 'on improving efficiency' is certainly the most natural rendering in English.
1 hr
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agree  Veronika McLaren
3 hrs
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agree  John Detre
8 hrs
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agree  113160: sounds best.
8 hrs
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agree  cmwilliams: On second thought, I think this sounds the most natural.
21 hrs
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4 hrs   confidence: Answerer confidence 4/5Answerer confidence 4/5 peer agreement (net): +2
In all our activities the focus is on development and improvement in efficiency


Explanation:
I would leave out the second "on" as no repetition necessary

Bashiqa
France
Local time: 03:04
Works in field
Native speaker of: Native in EnglishEnglish

Peer comments on this answer (and responses from the answerer)
agree  Joyce A: This also works. It's smooth and natural.
5 hrs
agree  airmailrpl: In all our activities the focus is on development and efficiency improvement
1 day8 hrs
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