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Thread poster: bellamoore1225
bellamoore1225
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Jun 2, 2006

I am a bridesmaid in charge of sending out save the date cards for a bridal shower (a lot of guests live out-of-state). The shower has a medieval theme so we are attempting to make the wording on the save the date card in somewhat easy medieval type wording.

If anyone could give some suggestions, it would be much appreciated. Is it more appropriate to say the fair maiden lady Kimberley and drop the last name. Here is what I have so far.

Hear ye! Hear ye!
Let it be known throughout the land

The fair maiden Kimberley Harwood
has found her man

We ask thy help to pass the time
And shorten thy wait
A shower is planned
So save the date.

The traditional shower of the maiden will be held on Saturday, the Twenty Sixth day of August in the year of our Lord Two Thousand and Six

Hosted By: The Bridal Party

Feasting and Merriment will be had by all

The honor of thy presence will be hereby
humbly requested in a future invitation


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Jack Doughty  Identity Verified
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Drop the surname Jun 4, 2006

I'd just say the fair maiden (or maid) Kimberley.

I don't think your should say "hereby" and "in a future invitaton".
"Hereby" would mean "by means of this letter".

It looks a pretty good effort at archaic English to me. Of course, it isn't actually medieval English, as in the works of Geoffrey Chaucer, for example, but if it were, no-one would understand it.

[Edited at 2006-06-04 10:50]


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John Farebrother  Identity Verified
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archaic Jun 4, 2006

I would say 'ye' instead of 'thou', as the latter is singular
also 'shall' instead of 'will'


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thy/thou is ok Jun 7, 2006

I think thy/thou is OK - if you are addressing the recipient of the card then it would be OK to use the singular form. (If you are addressing more than one person in the card then obviously the plural form would be better.)

You could change has to hath, which is the old 3rd person singular form.

The line which says "Hosted by: the Bridal Party" strikes me as rather modern, though I'm not sure why. Perhaps it's the colon?


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