Pablo Neruda in EN - can anybody help (urgently) with 3 verses???
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xxxLia Fail  Identity Verified
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Sep 2, 2004

I need an officcial EN TRANSLATION - if available - of three verses that have 'turned up' in a job I'm doing (to my horror!):


Que la tierra florezca en mis acciones
como en el jugo de oro de las viñas,
que perfume el dolor de mis canciones
como un fruto olvidado en la campiña.

Que trascienda mi carne a sembradura
ávida de brotar por todas partes,
que mis arterias lleven agua pura,
¡agua que canta cuando se reparte!

Yo quiero estar desnudo en las gavillas,
pisando por los cascos enemigos,
yo quiero abrirme y entregar semillas
de pan ¡yo quiero ser de tierra y trigo!

See:

http://www.libreriahispana.com/neruda/ventana.html

I wonder if anyone has a book of his poems in English that includes these verses?




[Edited at 2004-09-02 19:33]


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mónica alfonso  Identity Verified
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Try this site: Sep 2, 2004

http://www.poemhunter.com/pablo-neruda/poems/poet-6638/page-1/

Hope you can find what you need.
Mónica


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xxxLia Fail  Identity Verified
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No luck Sep 2, 2004

Thanks Monica

Nice site:-)

I did searches but found nothing.

What I need is at least the possible title in English, otherwise I haven't a hope of locating it:-)


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Susana Galilea  Identity Verified
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twilight/twilight book Sep 2, 2004

The poem is from "Crepusculario" and I have not found an English translation for it, but these might help...

Pablo Neruda - The Academy of American Poets
... to finance the publication of his first book, Crepusculario ("Twilight"). ... link will
open in a new browser window.). ... Pablo Neruda exhibits elsewhere on the web ...
www.poets.org/poets/poets.cfm?prmID=285 - 33k - Cached - Similar pages

Seashore Poet Spotlight
... and diplomat, Neruda has exerted wide influence in. Latin America. His many volumes
of poetry include. Crepusculario [twilight book] (1919), Twenty Love. ...
sandyshorespoetry.tripod.com/id30.htm - 10k - Cached - Similar pages


Luck!

Susana Galilea
Accredited Translator EUTI
sgalilea@ispwest.com
www.accentonspanish.com


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Henry Hinds  Identity Verified
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Try it yourself Sep 3, 2004

There is nothing official about Pablo Neruda. He has something to say to all of us and normally does so in language we can all understand. So give it a try yourself, if he were atill around I think he would be glad to see you do it!

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xxxLia Fail  Identity Verified
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You're joking! Sep 3, 2004

Henry Hinds wrote:

There is nothing official about Pablo Neruda. He has something to say to all of us and normally does so in language we can all understand. So give it a try yourself, if he were atill around I think he would be glad to see you do it!


It would take me hours/days to even attempt to do justice to the poem............

I was completely unaware that these verses were included in the text....uncredited, translated to PT. I wasn't contracted to translate poetry, which is another ballgame altogether. One or two lines maybe, but not three verses....

So if I can't find a published translation, I will provide the original ES, plus suggestions for substutition with a translated poem/verses taken from the site that Monica suggested (PoemHunter)....

Thanks to Susana for the leads, which I will follow up later:-)


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Abdul Mukhid  Identity Verified
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Try this site too Sep 3, 2004

Try this site. There supporters of Neruda. But, I think you'd better translate them yourself. You know, the famous aphorism, "the author is dead" so you just can translate their works with all your taste and style of language.

http://www.dialoguepoetry.org/


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Parrot  Identity Verified
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Where the verses are imbedded into a larger text Sep 3, 2004

you have all the excuse to use free verse.

I agree with Henry: get into character and "hack" it. Remember Nabokov:

What is translation? On a platter
A poet's pale and glaring head
A parrot's screech, a monkey's chatter
And profanation of the dead.



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xxxLia Fail  Identity Verified
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Yes, but 100 words would take me aaaaaggggggggggeeeesss! Sep 5, 2004

That's the other problem, one doesn't throw off a few lines of poetry like one would a few lines of text! Even free poetry!

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