Jan 20, 2002 09:13
22 yrs ago
German term
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Native in: English
Works in: German to English, French to English
Des Durstes Brene, ach,
German to English
Art/Literary
Poetry & Literature
poetry
Now, I'm no poet! And I've told the customer this, but to no avail ... I've got a couple of these things that crop up (in a welcome message for a restaurant) and have been told to 'do my creative best'. So I thought I'd throw it open and see if any of you are feeling inspired!
Full text:
Des Durstes Brenne, ach,
Wie Feuer ist's zu spüren;
Wenn man nicht löschen tat,
Ein Unglück könnt passieren
Thanks for any suggestions!
Mary
Full text:
Des Durstes Brenne, ach,
Wie Feuer ist's zu spüren;
Wenn man nicht löschen tat,
Ein Unglück könnt passieren
Thanks for any suggestions!
Mary
Proposed translations
(English)
| 4 +10 | attempt |
Anita Millar (X)
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| 4 | My burning thirst... |
Ulla Haufe
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| 4 | My non-native try |
Mats Wiman
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| 4 | I tried to stick as close to the text and the rythm as possible |
Mark Mulder (X)
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| 4 | The heat of thirst, alas,... |
Christa Zeller Thomas
|
Proposed translations
+10
40 mins
Selected
attempt
O quench these dire
flames of of thirst
before the fire
does its worst.
Your boss has some nerve!
Good luck,
Anita
flames of of thirst
before the fire
does its worst.
Your boss has some nerve!
Good luck,
Anita
4 KudoZ points awarded for this answer.
Comment: "What can I say, your versions were all more inspired than anything my prosaic mind could come up with! I'm going to tweak this a tiny bit to 'Come quench your dire Flames of thirst Before the fire Does its worst' as it will suit my restaurant context better, but it is otherwise perfect! Thank you very much, you have saved me hours of agonising!"
26 mins
Ulla Haufe
20 Years Experience in Electronics
Works in: English to German, German to English, French to German
My burning thirst...
My burning thirst, oh Heaven,
hurts like fire's spell
Not to extinguish it
would cause damage from hell
Hello Mary, this is my feeble attempt. It certainly need improvement
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Note added at 2002-01-20 09:40:41 (GMT)
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I hate my typos: needs
hurts like fire's spell
Not to extinguish it
would cause damage from hell
Hello Mary, this is my feeble attempt. It certainly need improvement
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Note added at 2002-01-20 09:40:41 (GMT)
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I hate my typos: needs
1 hr
Mats Wiman
Sweden
Sweden
Sweden
DEU / ENG / FRA / SPA > SWE since 1982
Native in: Swedish (Variant: Stockholm) 
Works in: German to Swedish, English to Swedish, Swedish
My non-native try
A burning thirst
me plagues like fire
And if not quenched
the outcome might be dire
me plagues like fire
And if not quenched
the outcome might be dire
Reference:
1 hr
Mark Mulder (X)
Mark Mulder (X)
Works in: English to Dutch, Dutch to English, German to English, and 1 more.
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I tried to stick as close to the text and the rythm as possible
Of a flaming thirst, oh,
How it tickles like a fire;
For not to put it out,
Is tempting with desire.
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Note added at 2002-01-20 10:35:48 (GMT)
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Here\'s another one, but it\'s a bit morbid at the end:
Oh, that burning thirst,
Raging like a fire;
He who doesn’t wet,
Could well end up a pyre.
How it tickles like a fire;
For not to put it out,
Is tempting with desire.
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Note added at 2002-01-20 10:35:48 (GMT)
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Here\'s another one, but it\'s a bit morbid at the end:
Oh, that burning thirst,
Raging like a fire;
He who doesn’t wet,
Could well end up a pyre.
7 hrs
Christa Zeller Thomas
Excellent work - quickly and reliably.
Works in: German to English, English to German, English, and 1 more.
The heat of thirst, alas,...
The heat of thirst, alas,
like fire burns;
if it be not quenched,
perchance, a mishap pass!
What fun!
like fire burns;
if it be not quenched,
perchance, a mishap pass!
What fun!
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