hastily written... 19:57 Feb 7, 2013
There are problems with clarity of intent and with punctuation. Many things are unclear: There should not be a comma between "situation" and "that", there probably should be one between "reaction" and "and", (then there is most likely a missing word or whole truncated passage after "personal", there probably should be a semi-colon between what is missing and "to incite"... It's hard to say. If "focus" is a verb (parallel to "to present but used without "to", then the reapparition of "to" in front of "incite" is puzzling. If "focus" is a noun (create enough of a reaction and a certain quality of focus in a person?) then, the whole sentence is different... Is English the first language of the writer? |