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English translation: as opposed to / as compared to 73.45% for Shanghai ...

22:12 Aug 21, 2014
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Based on data from the fifth national census in 2000, 77.50% of the population of Beijing have completed at least junior high school, 73.45% for Shanghai, 42.70% for Sichuan, and 31.79% for Guizhou.
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How can I structure this sentence?

"73.45% for Shanghai...", or "the fugure being 73.45% for Shanghai...", or something else?

Thanks.
Ms Faith
Selected answer:as opposed to / as compared to 73.45% for Shanghai ...
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DLyons
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4 +4as opposed to / as compared to 73.45% for Shanghai ...
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4figures show x% for city1, y% for city2, etc.
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4with x% for
David Hollywood


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as opposed to / as compared to 73.45% for Shanghai ...


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DLyons
Ireland
Local time: 08:10
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Asker: Thank you D, but actually it is Beijing and Shanghai compared with the other 2.


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agree  Tina Vonhof (X): Simple and straight forward.
2 hrs
  -> Thanks Tina.

agree  Aleksandra Kleschina
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agree  Tony M
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agree  Phong Le
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13 mins   confidence: Answerer confidence 4/5Answerer confidence 4/5
figures show x% for city1, y% for city2, etc.


Explanation:
77.50% of the population of Beijing have completed at least junior high school, ***meanwhile the figures show*** 73.45% for Shanghai, 42.70% for Sichuan, and 31.79% for Guizhou.

I think it really means the above, or to rephrase it: "as for Shanghai, the data shows 73.45%, etc."

Zsofia Koszegi-Nagy
United Kingdom
Local time: 08:10
Native speaker of: Native in HungarianHungarian
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with x% for


Explanation:
I would suggest and please see my discusiion entries

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Note added at 32 mins (2014-08-21 22:44:28 GMT)
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for example: with 73.45% for Shanghai

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Note added at 36 mins (2014-08-21 22:48:31 GMT)
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but you only need to include "with" for the first city mentioned after Beijing (i.e. Shanghai) ... then just say ,"x % for Sichuan" etc.

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Note added at 37 mins (2014-08-21 22:49:53 GMT)
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so the text would read: Based on data from the fifth national census in 2000, 77.50% of the population of Beijing have completed at least junior high school, with 73.45% for Shanghai, 42.70% for Sichuan, and 31.79% for Guizhou.


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Note added at 41 mins (2014-08-21 22:53:20 GMT)
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and should read "discussion entries" of course

David Hollywood
Local time: 05:10
Native speaker of: English
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neutral  Cilian O'Tuama: Yet another incoherent answer, David. Might I suggest you slow down and compose your final answer, rather than confusing the issue with fragments every 2 minutes?
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for


Explanation:
'For' as used in the original text is perfectly fine. The text mentions 'for' in the case of the other cities only to avoid repetition of the frase "of the population of ------ have completed at least junior high school" with every city.
Also there is no juxtaposition of Beijing with other three, just a statement of fact(figures) for all the four cities.

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Note added at 14 hrs (2014-08-22 12:58:44 GMT)
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What I am getting at is there is no need to rephrase the sentence

YESHWANT UMRALKAR
India
Local time: 13:40
Native speaker of: Native in EnglishEnglish
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