mingling immediately into rushing streams
English translation: forming little rivulets which quickly merged into rushing streams
| 13:29 Apr 24, 2005 |
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| 4 +7 | forming little rivulets which quickly merged into rushing streams |
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| 5 | water in tiny streamlets gathered at once into rushing streams...plus other slight rearrangements |
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| 4 | See explanation below... |
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11 mins confidence: 
See explanation below... Explanation: First, 'puddles on their way': I think you'd be better to say 'puddles along their way' or '...along their path', as 'something on the way' is a specific construction in English meaning 'about to arrive' --- like saying 'she had a baby on the way', or 'the first snow is a sign that Christmas is on the way' --- i.e. won't be long in coming. Secondly, I'm not sure about the use of 'immediately', it sounds a little bit odd here. I'd be more inclined to say something along the lines of "tiny rivulets of water soon joining hands into rushing streamlets" I'd avoid the use of streams, unless you literally mean that there is a stream running alongide the road into which the rivulets run. 'mingling' is a nice word, but questionable here, perhaps, inamsuch as my image of it involves the mixing of two different things in such a way as to merge invisibly, like 'plain clothes policeman mingling with the crowd', rather than the idea of a sort of confluence, as here. -------------------------------------------------- Note added at 13 mins (2005-04-24 13:42:29 GMT) -------------------------------------------------- Apologies for typos: alongside, inasmuch :-( -------------------------------------------------- Note added at 35 mins (2005-04-24 14:04:40 GMT) -------------------------------------------------- ...maybe those rivulets could be \'...soon flowing together to form rushing streams\' --- now, worded like this, you COULD get away with \'streams\' |
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16 mins confidence:
below Explanation: Soon there were large puddles on their way. The rain pattered the stones and soon tiny streamlets of water intermingled and turned into rushing streams. -------------------------------------------------- Note added at 44 mins (2005-04-24 14:13:57 GMT) -------------------------------------------------- Two slightly different versions for your perusal. Soon there were large puddles on their way. The rain pattered the stones and tiny streamlets of water intermingled and turned into rushing streams. Soon large puddles began to form. The rain pattered the stones and then tiny streamlets of water intermingled turning into rushing streams. |
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1 hr confidence: peer agreement (net): +7
peer agreement (net): +7forming little rivulets which quickly merged into rushing streams Explanation: Soon they were seeing large puddles along their way. The rain pattered on the stones, forming little rivulets which quickly merged into rushing streams. |
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