Apr 27, 2005 17:14
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French term
Angoisse au Monastère
French to English
Art/Literary
Poetry & Literature
teen bilingual literature
it's the title of the teen novel I'm translating. Weird things happen in that place and this 13-year old kid gets lost there, hence, I guess, the 'angoisse'.
I don't like anguish, anxiety, angst... nothing sounds right. Fright maybe? or fear? or distress, panic, terror? I need your advice! Some are too strong, others not enough.
I haven't been able to come up with an alternative.
Maybe you'll find something great?
TIA!
oh, and FYI, it's also the title of one of the chapters.
(it's a bilingual book)
I don't like anguish, anxiety, angst... nothing sounds right. Fright maybe? or fear? or distress, panic, terror? I need your advice! Some are too strong, others not enough.
I haven't been able to come up with an alternative.
Maybe you'll find something great?
TIA!
oh, and FYI, it's also the title of one of the chapters.
(it's a bilingual book)
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Proposed translations
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Angoisse au Monast�re
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Scary Monastery
it rhymes :-)
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Comment: "I like it. Thanks again Rita."
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Madness in the monastery
Wow, could be anything!
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Angoisse au Monast�re
High Anxiety in the Monastery
Well, there's a good precedent for it...!
Maybe Panic in the Priory ?
Maybe Panic in the Priory ?
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Can Altinbay
: I love both your suggestions. Perhaps A Series of Freightful Events? Only kidding, that'll get you sued.
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Thanks, Can! ;-)))
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Corinne Bono
: I like both! Together, they should suit most styles
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Thanks, Bono! :-)
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Angoisse au Monast�re
Mystery in the Monastery
or Fear in the Monastery
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The Monastery Mysteries
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The Mysterious Monastery
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The Monastery Mysteries
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The Mysterious Monastery
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Trouble at the Monastry
I think this is a better way of approaching it rather than concentrating on words for 'fear' or 'anxiety' - it also has a better ring to it. Furthermore, 'angoisse' is often used to express the idea of 'trouble' or 'dilemma' rather than the emotion produced.
Whichever option you choose, please note that 'au monastere' is 'at the' rather than 'in the'.
Good luck!
Whichever option you choose, please note that 'au monastere' is 'at the' rather than 'in the'.
Good luck!
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Jitters at the Monastery
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Angoisse au Monast�re
Freaked out at the Friary
Or, Freaky Friary.
For a slightly more teen flavour.
HTH
Sara
For a slightly more teen flavour.
HTH
Sara
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Jane Lamb-Ruiz (X)
: Freak Out at the Friary
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That's it. Thank you.
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Corinne Bono
: I quite like it if the style of the novel allows it. Freaking out at the friary perhaps
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Cheers, Bono!
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Angoisse au Monast�re
Monastery Creeps
suggest to have the creeps and there are creeps there...yucko monster-like beings or humans
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Panic at the Priory ... Monastery of Dread
I really like dread, but it doesn't quite "click" with "monastery" -- maybe "The Monks of Dread" ?? "Hooded Dread",... Good luck!
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see suggestions.
Seeing I don't know if there are monks there still on not, these may not be suitable.
And I liked some of my colleagues' suggestions very much anyway.
But if you have monks inhabiting this monastery or if suitable to mention monks rather than monastery, you could perhaps try the following as well:
- Monkey business at the monks' (so it doesn't say anything about the "angoisse" itself, but about the cause and this often happens in book titles between languages, I've seen since childhood)
- Turmoil by the monks
- hocus pocus at the monastery (if suitable)
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Scary business at the monastery?
and I\'ll fish for ideas after some sleep if you haven\'t seen anything catching your eye in these \'spooky happenings at the monestary\"
And just one last suggestion before I hit (gently) the pillow and hope not to have nightmares of happenings by the monastery like a 13 year old, if you pick an adjective instead of a noun (scary instead of anguish for example) you are let with a lot more freedom. All you then have to do is take your choice of neutral enough nouns (business, happenings, ... )
Happy hunting!
And I liked some of my colleagues' suggestions very much anyway.
But if you have monks inhabiting this monastery or if suitable to mention monks rather than monastery, you could perhaps try the following as well:
- Monkey business at the monks' (so it doesn't say anything about the "angoisse" itself, but about the cause and this often happens in book titles between languages, I've seen since childhood)
- Turmoil by the monks
- hocus pocus at the monastery (if suitable)
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Scary business at the monastery?
and I\'ll fish for ideas after some sleep if you haven\'t seen anything catching your eye in these \'spooky happenings at the monestary\"
And just one last suggestion before I hit (gently) the pillow and hope not to have nightmares of happenings by the monastery like a 13 year old, if you pick an adjective instead of a noun (scary instead of anguish for example) you are let with a lot more freedom. All you then have to do is take your choice of neutral enough nouns (business, happenings, ... )
Happy hunting!
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Angoisse au Monast�re
"Abbey of Mystery"/Abbey of Fear
How about ditching the original title altogether? Either go for something like 'Abbey of Mystery' or 'Monastery of Fear', or just pick a title that reflects what the story's about. Sometimes original titles just don't translate very well - I've had some real horrors to translate, and have nearly always ended up with something quite different from the original French!
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