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17:14 Apr 27, 2005
French to English translations [PRO] Art/Literary - Poetry & Literature / teen bilingual literature
French term or phrase:Angoisse au Monastère
it's the title of the teen novel I'm translating. Weird things happen in that place and this 13-year old kid gets lost there, hence, I guess, the 'angoisse'.
I don't like anguish, anxiety, angst... nothing sounds right. Fright maybe? or fear? or distress, panic, terror? I need your advice! Some are too strong, others not enough.
I haven't been able to come up with an alternative.
Maybe you'll find something great?
oh, and FYI, it's also the title of one of the chapters.
(it's a bilingual book)
Explanation: I think this is a better way of approaching it rather than concentrating on words for 'fear' or 'anxiety' - it also has a better ring to it. Furthermore, 'angoisse' is often used to express the idea of 'trouble' or 'dilemma' rather than the emotion produced.
Whichever option you choose, please note that 'au monastere' is 'at the' rather than 'in the'.
HelenG United Kingdom Local time: 14:55 Works in field Native speaker of: English
Explanation: Seeing I don't know if there are monks there still on not, these may not be suitable.
And I liked some of my colleagues' suggestions very much anyway.
But if you have monks inhabiting this monastery or if suitable to mention monks rather than monastery, you could perhaps try the following as well:
- Monkey business at the monks' (so it doesn't say anything about the "angoisse" itself, but about the cause and this often happens in book titles between languages, I've seen since childhood)
- Turmoil by the monks
- hocus pocus at the monastery (if suitable)
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Scary business at the monastery?
and I\'ll fish for ideas after some sleep if you haven\'t seen anything catching your eye in these \'spooky happenings at the monestary\"
And just one last suggestion before I hit (gently) the pillow and hope not to have nightmares of happenings by the monastery like a 13 year old, if you pick an adjective instead of a noun (scary instead of anguish for example) you are let with a lot more freedom. All you then have to do is take your choice of neutral enough nouns (business, happenings, ... )
Bono Local time: 15:55 Native speaker of: French, English PRO pts in category: 4
Explanation: How about ditching the original title altogether? Either go for something like 'Abbey of Mystery' or 'Monastery of Fear', or just pick a title that reflects what the story's about. Sometimes original titles just don't translate very well - I've had some real horrors to translate, and have nearly always ended up with something quite different from the original French!
Sue Dyson Local time: 14:55 Specializes in field Native speaker of: English