окно в полнеба глубиной

English translation: a window that framed half the deepening sky

20:06 Feb 8, 2009

Russian to English translations [PRO]
Art/Literary - Poetry & Literature

Russian term or phrase: окно в полнеба глубиной

Лампу включать не хотелось. Повеяло свежестью и сильным ароматом акации. Май, от него голова кругом идет. Моника повернулась к синему распахнутому окну* в полнеба глубиной*.Белая полная луна свысока жалела всё живое. Большая Москва замерла тревожно под ней.

The political events in Poland have had strong repercussions in Moscow which is unable to interfere this time. Already many progressive Russian writers have written books about legendary “Solidarity” and it’s founder L. Valensa that later in history would be defined by sociologists as a start of the collapse of Soviet Empire.
Monica is Polish by blood, she is the daughter of a Polish diplomat in Moscow and she was brought up by her grandmother in the best Polish traditions: she is a Catholic, loves classical music and she loves to read. Having been an artist she can not stop her imagination taking her away from the reality when she reads something. Reading an impressive essay about “Solidarity” she imagines herself as Jean d’Ark leading people onto barricades, she cries out in an abundance of overwhelming emotions during her reading . She finishes reading and:

< There wasn’t any wish to switch on the lamp. A breath of freshness together with a strong aroma of acacia entered the room. The month of May, it gave a feeling of vertigo. Monica looked into the blue through a window that was flung wide open *в полнеба глубиной*. A white waxing moon was imparting it’s sorrow to everything alive. Moscow was spreading it’s for boding underneath it . >

These Russian words “a window half-sky deep” are about large space in front of Monica, something similar to the sensation you may have when you are standing at the edge of the mountain ridge. She obviously has strong feelings and these words are more about them not the window. My own variations about this “voluminous” window do not satisfy me.
Please, help.

Alexandra Taggart KudoZ activity Questions: 36 (1 open) (2 closed without grading) Answers: 1891 Russian Federation
Local time: 18:05

English translation:a window that framed half the deepening sky

Explanation:
I see the image of a large window that holds half the sky within its frame.

Selected response from:

Paul Kachur
Germany
Local time: 17:05

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Summary of answers provided

4 +4

window, revealing an almost bottomless sapphire sky

Mark Berelekhis

3 +3

a window half as wide as the sky

David Knowles

a window that framed half the deepening sky

Paul Kachur

3 +1

to the breathtaking sky

Henry Schroeder

(the flung-open) window, half the night blue sky visible beyond it...

Victoria dlV

a window looking over half the sky

Andrew Vdovin

well of sky in the ceiling window

axpamen

Answers

53 mins confidence:

a window that framed half the deepening sky

Explanation:
I see the image of a large window that holds half the sky within its frame.

Paul Kachur
Germany
Local time: 17:05
Native speaker of:

English
PRO pts in category: 4

Notes to answerer

Asker: "Deepening" in your suggested description I see as " increasing in depth". The frame is ordinary. Thank you.

1 hr confidence:

peer agreement (net): +4

window, revealing an almost bottomless sapphire sky

Explanation:
Trade one pretty image for another. I've tried various literal and semi-literal versions, but none of them work, IMO.

Mark Berelekhis
United States
Local time: 11:05
Specializes in field
Native speaker of:

Russian,

English
PRO pts in category: 666

Notes to answerer

Asker: Bottomless sky? Topless ocean?

Asker: I believe you went out of the frame too far: bottomless space, endless Universe...Thank you for the flight, I am with you in my heart. I have a contact with the author who wants it "Exactly the same, ex-zakt-ly!!!" and repeats it to me all the time.

Asker: Драка за "рога" шла два дня. Я победила-убедила в их необходимости и поставила в текст. Спасибо ещё ра.

1 hr confidence:

peer agreement (net): +3

a window half as wide as the sky

Explanation:
Maybe "wide" rather than "deep" would work in English. (Also "its" for the possessive!)

David Knowles
Local time: 16:05
Specializes in field
Native speaker of:

English
PRO pts in category: 206

Notes to answerer

Asker: The trouble is that the window is an ordinary sized window revealing the depth of the sky.

Asker: Thanks a lot!

9 hrs confidence:

a window looking over half the sky

Explanation:
a window revealing half (of) the (deep blue) sky

Andrew Vdovin
Local time: 22:05
Specializes in field
Native speaker of:

Russian
PRO pts in category: 88

Notes to answerer

Asker: Just in reverse:" window overlooking half the sky". Sounds close. Thanks.

12 hrs confidence:

well of sky in the ceiling window

Explanation:
колодец неба голубой)))
можно попробовать sky's window

axpamen
Local time: 18:05
Native speaker of:

Russian
PRO pts in category: 4

Notes to answerer

Asker: Very well you can say "a bucket of sky". Thanks.

14 hrs confidence:

peer agreement (net): +1

to the breathtaking sky

Explanation:
I would definitely avoid a dependent clause or gerund construction. Defining the amount of sky she sees is totally unimportant - obviously she can't see the whole sky through her window.

Henry Schroeder
United States
Local time: 11:05
Specializes in field
Native speaker of:

English
PRO pts in category: 174
1 corroborated select project
in this pair and field

Notes to answerer

Asker: Your suggestion is nice but it is almost the way of getting round the translation. Thank you for trying to help me.

2 days 7 hrs confidence:

(the flung-open) window, half the night blue sky visible beyond it...

Explanation:
one has to take into account that it is night, therefore one does not expect to read a description of 'a pale blue' sky. The colour of the sky however is important, and the word 'night' conjures up imagery of a velvety, inky blue sky...

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Note added at 6 days (2009-02-15 07:36:31 GMT) Post-grading
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Sorry, the above should read: 'night-blue'; or better still 'dusky blue sky'

Victoria dlV
Specializes in field
Native speaker of:

English

Notes to answerer

Asker: Thanks my Majesty! The trouble is that I am running out of lines. I am very short with time as well - that is the demand of the author. To say frankly, it is possible to put EVERYTHING I've done so far much, much better. Yes, you are right, he has put it "Blue" not for nothing, in a spring time the evening sky is bright blue, even electric azure. Unfortunately I've sent this part of the text already. Thank you, I see, the poetry within the prose does touch you. Thanks.

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