Glossary entry (derived from question below)
English term or phrase:
have people's lives woven into them
English answer:
(Within/)In the patterns of this carpet are woven the tales of people's lives, one day at a time.
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KathyT
Jul 26, 2005 13:59
19 yrs ago
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English term
have people's lives woven into them
English
Art/Literary
Poetry & Literature
children's literature
The patterns of this carpet have all the people's lives, day by day, woven into them.
Dear native English speakers!
Please advise on the phrase. Is the idea clear here? It's hard for me to be sure since I'm no NES.
Also, I'm not really sure where I should put the 'day by day' part to make the sentence sound smoother.
The goddess's carpet is in fact the whole world with all people's lives woven into it.
This is my translation from Russian.
Thank you!
Dear native English speakers!
Please advise on the phrase. Is the idea clear here? It's hard for me to be sure since I'm no NES.
Also, I'm not really sure where I should put the 'day by day' part to make the sentence sound smoother.
The goddess's carpet is in fact the whole world with all people's lives woven into it.
This is my translation from Russian.
Thank you!
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(Within/)In the patterns of this carpet are woven the tales of people's lives, one day at a time.
another suggestion...
HTH ;-)
HTH ;-)
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Nick Lingris
: Most definitely!
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Many thanks, Nick :-)
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NancyLynn
: smooth!
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Many thanks, Nancy :-)
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jennifer newsome (X)
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Thanks, jennifer :-)
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Saiwai Translation Services
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Thanks, STS :-)
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Comment: "Thank you Kathy, I think your version is better. Thanks everybody!"
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That's fine
Your translation seems very good to me.
Peer comment(s):
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David Copeland
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Thank you.
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Tony M
: Except I'm worried about "all THE people's lives..." --- WHICH people's? Or does it mean 'the lives of everyone in the world'?
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Thank you.. I think the latter. Maybe "...have everyone's lives woven into them day by day..."
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jennifer newsome (X)
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Thank you.
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Day by day, all the peoples' lives are woven into the patterns of this carpet.
Another suggestion. This is how I would arrange these particular words, without changing any of them. The way you wrote it was fine, but to my ear, this is smoother, more typical and doesn't change your word choices. (This also puts the alliteration of the d's right up front emphasizing that soothing, rhythmic sense of days and patterns and lives interweaving.)
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Note added at 16 hrs 4 mins (2005-07-27 06:03:55 GMT)
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Or \"people\'s\", whatever is more applicable.
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Note added at 16 hrs 4 mins (2005-07-27 06:03:55 GMT)
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Or \"people\'s\", whatever is more applicable.
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