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Sunday Mornin' Comin' Down

Well, I woke up Sunday morning
With no way to hold my head that didn't hurt.
And the beer I had for breakfast wasn't bad,
So I had one more for dessert.
Then I fumbled in my closet through my clothes
And found my cleanest dirty shirt.
Then I washed my face and combed my hair
And stumbled down the stairs to meet the day.

I'd smoked my mind the night before
With cigarettes and songs I'd been picking.
But I lit my first and watched a small kid
Playing with a can that he was kicking.
Then I walked across the street
And caught the Sunday smell of someone's frying chicken.
And Lord, it took me back to something that I'd lost
Somewhere, somehow along the way.

On a Sunday morning sidewalk,
I'm wishing, Lord, that I was stoned.
'Cause there's something in a Sunday
That makes a body feel alone.
And there's nothing short a' dying
That's half as lonesome as the sound
Of the sleeping city sidewalk
And Sunday morning coming down.

In the park I saw a daddy
With a laughing little girl that he was swinging.
And I stopped beside a Sunday school
And listened to the songs they were singing.
Then I headed down the street,
And somewhere far away a lonely bell was ringing,
And it echoed through the canyon
Like the disappearing dreams of yesterday.

On a Sunday morning sidewalk,
I'm wishing, Lord, that I was stoned.
'Cause there's something in a Sunday
That makes a body feel alone.
And there's nothing short a' dying
That's half as lonesome as the sound
Of the sleeping city sidewalk
And Sunday morning coming down.

The winning entry has been announced in this pair.

There were 11 entries submitted in this pair during the submission phase, 3 of which were selected by peers to advance to the finals round. The winning entry was determined based on finals round voting by peers.

Competition in this pair is now closed.


Entries (11 total; 3 finalists) Expand all entries

Entry #14695 — Discuss 0
Winner
Voting points1st2nd3rd
9922 x43 x25 x1
Rating typeOverallQualityAccuracy
Segments3.563.65 (79 ratings)3.47 (76 ratings)
Entry4.114.00 (12 ratings)4.22 (9 ratings)
Entry tagging:
 
 
  • 3 users entered 15 "like" tags
  • 1 user agreed with "likes" (6 total agrees)
  • 3 users disagreed with "likes" (3 total disagrees)
-2
2
Проснулся раз я утром в воскресенье, А голова болит, как не тряси.
Flows well
Alexandra Rusakevich
+1
Нашел рубашку чище остальных, Немного причесался и умылся,
Flows well
Svetlana Novoselova Bichen
+1
И вышел из дому я на своих двоих.
Flows well
Svetlana Novoselova Bichen
Мозги прокурены еще с полночной пьянки,
Flows well
Alexandra Rusakevich
Мозги прокурены еще с полночной пьянки, И музыка в ушах еще звенит, Я засмолил цигарку, вижу рядом - Пацан с жестянкой бегает, гремит.
Flows well
Svetlana Potton
И музыка в ушах еще звенит,
Flows well
Alexandra Rusakevich
-1
+1
1
Я засмолил цигарку, вижу рядом - Пацан с жестянкой бегает, гремит.
Good term selection
Svetlana Novoselova Bichen
И вспомнилось мне, Боже, то что было, И что когда-то в прошлом я оставил.
Flows well
Alexandra Rusakevich
+1
Вдруг пожалел, что не под кайфом я.
Good term selection
Svetlana Novoselova Bichen
Скажите мне, что так же одиноко - Такого нет на свете, без сомненья - Как в этом сонном городе дороги, И наступающее утро воскресенья.
Flows well
Svetlana Potton
+1
А где-то в парке вижу я папашу,
Good term selection
Svetlana Novoselova Bichen
А где-то в парке вижу я папашу, Что на качелях девочку качает. И постою я у воскресной школы, Послушать песни, что там дети распевают.
Flows well
Svetlana Potton
+1
Послушать песни, что там дети распевают.
Good term selection
Svetlana Novoselova Bichen
Затем пойду я дальше по дороге, И одинокий колокол услышу, И эхо отражается и гаснет, Как и о днях давно ушедших мысли.
Flows well
Svetlana Potton
И одинокий колокол услышу, И эхо отражается и гаснет, Как и о днях давно ушедших мысли.
Flows well
Svetlana Potton
Entry #14612 — Discuss 0
Yuri Arinovich
Yuri Arinovich
Russian Federation
Finalist
Voting points1st2nd3rd
9217 x410 x24 x1
Rating typeOverallQualityAccuracy
Segments3.143.39 (71 ratings)2.89 (64 ratings)
Entry4.034.22 (9 ratings)3.83 (6 ratings)
Entry tagging:
 
 
  • 2 users entered 11 "like" tags
  • 6 users agreed with "likes" (8 total agrees)
  • 1 user disagreed with "likes" (1 total disagree)
-1
+3
1
пожалуй, дайте два
Other
Славная ал​люзия )
Alexandra Schneeuhr
в дремоту улиц городских
Flows well
Alexandra Schneeuhr
Я продымил вчера весь вечер под гитару
Flows well
Alexander Kozhukhov
Гоняет банку по асфальту мостовой
Flows well
Alexander Kozhukhov
+1
я вдохнул дымок из кухни
Flows well
Alexander Kozhukhov
+1
Что когда-то было, но как будто не со мной
Flows well
Alexander Kozhukhov
+3
1
Одиночество, тяжелое, как ртуть
Good term selection
класс
Alexander Kozhukhov
Как будто смерть к тебе приходит Рано утром, в выходной
Flows well
Alexander Kozhukhov
Где-то вдалеке раздался среди тихих улиц
Flows well
Alexandra Schneeuhr
Эхо от него поплыло и растаяло в каньоне,
Flows well
Alexandra Schneeuhr
Как вчерашний позабытый сон.
Other
... и разм​ер тоже хо​рош
Alexandra Schneeuhr
Entry #14578 — Discuss 0
Helena Kryukova
Helena Kryukova
Russian Federation
Finalist
Voting points1st2nd3rd
548 x48 x26 x1
Rating typeOverallQualityAccuracy
Segments3.253.37 (59 ratings)3.12 (63 ratings)
Entry3.784.17 (12 ratings)3.38 (8 ratings)
Entry tagging:
 
 
  • 2 users entered 3 "like" tags
Воскресное утро
Other
Все хорошо​ в этом те​ксте - и р​азмер, и р​ифмовка, и​ настроени​е.
Alexandra Schneeuhr
хоть и не больной,
Flows well
Elena Lukun
И на завтрак выпил пива — что, не так уж и паршиво
Flows well
...и внутр​енняя рифм​а - очень ​удачна
Alexandra Schneeuhr


Non-finalist entries

The following entries were not selected by peers to advance to finals-round voting.

Entry #14893 — Discuss 0
Elina Green
Elina Green
United Kingdom
Rating typeOverallQualityAccuracy
Segments3.273.35 (68 ratings)3.19 (68 ratings)
Entry3.453.22 (9 ratings)3.67 (6 ratings)
Entry tagging:
 
 
  • No "like" tags
Entry #14728 — Discuss 0
Rating typeOverallQualityAccuracy
Segments3.043.32 (59 ratings)2.75 (60 ratings)
Entry3.953.89 (9 ratings)4.00 (6 ratings)
Entry tagging:
 
 
  • 1 user entered 3 "like" tags
  • 1 user agreed with "likes" (1 total agree)
Чиркнув спичкой, засмотрелся как мальчишка По консервной банке метко бьет
Good term selection
Alexander Kozhukhov
+1
Этот запах воскресенья вдруг напомнил те мгновенья, Те, которые умчались, как во сне
Flows well
Alexander Kozhukhov
В воскресенье это утро Молчаливей смерти во сто крат
Flows well
Alexander Kozhukhov
Entry #14521 — Discuss 0
Rating typeOverallQualityAccuracy
Segments2.982.79 (51 ratings)3.18 (46 ratings)
Entry2.702.00 (7 ratings)3.40 (5 ratings)
Entry tagging:
 
 
  • No "like" tags
Entry #14780 — Discuss 0
Rating typeOverallQualityAccuracy
Segments2.922.84 (57 ratings)3.00 (56 ratings)
Entry2.952.50 (6 ratings)3.40 (5 ratings)
Entry tagging:
 
 
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Entry #14497 — Discuss 0
Sasha A. Palmer
Sasha A. Palmer
United States
Rating typeOverallQualityAccuracy
Segments2.822.72 (48 ratings)2.92 (47 ratings)
Entry2.932.60 (5 ratings)3.25 (4 ratings)
Entry tagging:
 
 
  • No "like" tags
Entry #14803 — Discuss 0
Mark Budman
Mark Budman
United States
Rating typeOverallQualityAccuracy
Segments2.792.39 (58 ratings)3.18 (48 ratings)
Entry2.741.80 (5 ratings)3.67 (3 ratings)
Entry tagging:
 
 
  • 1 user entered 1 "like" tag
  • 1 user agreed with "likes" (1 total agree)
  • 1 user disagreed with "likes" (1 total disagree)
-1
+1
1
Я Разваливаюсь на Части в Воскресенье Утром
Other
Good sense​ of humor
Alexander Kozhukhov
Entry #14653 — Discuss 0
Rating typeOverallQualityAccuracy
Segments2.602.40 (59 ratings)2.80 (52 ratings)
Entry3.002.50 (4 ratings)3.50 (2 ratings)
Entry tagging:
 
 
  • No "like" tags
Entry #14576 — Discuss 0
poposon2011
poposon2011
United States
Rating typeOverallQualityAccuracy
Segments2.392.34 (54 ratings)2.45 (48 ratings)
Entry1.851.40 (10 ratings)2.29 (7 ratings)
Entry tagging:
 
 
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